Friday, 3 April 2015

These billionaires are getting too easy ...

The virgin and the billionaire ...

Just because Jess Lockhart is a virgin in her late twenties doesn’t mean she isn’t interested in men. In fact, far from it: she fantasies about finding the perfect man who can fulfil her every desire.Her new boss, handsome billionaire Ellis McKenna, seems perfect for the job. It is clear he is as attracted to her, as she is to him. However, a tragic past has left Ellis vowing to never do ‘serious’ relationships again. Having allowed herself to be seduced by a billionaire can Jess teach him about love?

If you like Fifty Shades of Grey you’ll love this!

I usually love romantic novels and the cover and the back cover details showed great promise but as it turned out this was a bit naff.

This is definitely a case of insta-attraction and insta-love.  I so wanted to like these characters but their actions were rather strange for people who had never met before.  I know this is fiction but honestly these people’s action were a stretch by anyone’s imagination

I did like that some of the action was told through the inner monologues of the main characters,  These were initially, hilarious but quickly became stilted.  Hers was an ongoing internal argument with herself as to will she or won’t she.  In contrast his were a tad condescending and conceited.  There was some angst (again internal) which was equally repetitive and his is a bit too full on.

The male lead was a confusing person.  One minute he is being apologetic using archaic words like ‘martinet’ and the next he is being rather base especially when one takes into account the female lead’s history and the point in the relationship they were currently at.  It is as though the author is not sure what she wants her male lead to be.

The book is written to a tried and tested formula so there are no real surprises.  And there is some smut to enliven the proceedings along the way.  The dialogue at the end was very formal, stilted and urgh!.  Indeed the ending itself felt too rushed.

It appears to this reader that this was an attempt at a first draft that needs to be reworked into a tight gorgeous novel that is hinted at here.  The work of a good editor would have also corrected the time line errors.  It seems that the author could not remember when she got the couple together but it wasn’t the same day or even within 16 hours but in fact over four days later the first met.

Full Disclosure: ARC received from Netgalley for an honest review.

I rated this 3 stars on Netgalley and 'It was OK' on Goodreads (2 stars) and Amazon (3 stars).

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